Claim: In any field – business, politics, education and government – those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
The very building blocks of any enterprise rest on its leadership - the decision making taskforce. For any enterprise to function effectively and efficiently, its leadership should be in its pristine so as to deliver the best. Be it education, business, politics, government or any other institution, the whole and sole responsibility rests with them – the ring bearers. Evaluating the historical figures, assessing the current scenario, appraising the future aspirations, laying out plans, gauging the plausibility of bringing them into action, risk analysis and execution along with proper utiliz...
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Thank you so much for the
Thank you so much for the review! I will keep the suggestions in mind.
Thanks again! :)
Sentence: There is a room for funds for a larger mass been put to personal use, since always
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by a verb 'to be', past participle
Suggestion: Refer to mass and been
Sentence: Though, they are still not a fully democratic country, but the leadership is shifting from that of dictatorship to elected.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and elected
Sentence: However, one cannot propose a fixed yardstick as to how frequently, if at all, should the revitalization by a new leadership take place.
Description: The fragment leadership take place is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace take with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: A term of five years may limit the drawbacks of a governing institution but same tenure may mar the intellectualism of an educational institution.
Error: mar Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 614 350 (less words in real exams. write the essay in half an hour)
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.226 0.35
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
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Score: 5.5 out of 6
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 31 15
No. of Words: 614 350
No. of Characters: 3048 1500
No. of Different Words: 307 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.978 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.964 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.045 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 216 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 175 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 136 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 92 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.806 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.141 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.581 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.226 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.423 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5