Sending Astronauts to Mars - The problems
The text and the lecture offer two opposing views on whether or not human's travel to Mars is possible. While the reading passage lists problems that make it hard for humans to go to Mars, the professor contradicts the reasons given by the author, and states that although going to Mars would be a challenging project, there are ways to address each one of the problems stated in the reading.
First, the passage claims that astronauts will encounter lack of resources such as food, water, and oxygen during their trip because antithetical to the Moon's project which lasts only a few days, this journey will last at least two years. Storing resources for such a huge amount of time would be difficult. However, the professor asserts that there is a solution for this issue. Astronauts can cultivate plants in the spacecraft with an approach named "hydroponics". By doing so, they can use the plants as food source and the oxygen produced to breathe, and there are not heavy resources to take with which will perpetrate difficulties.
Next, the reading states that astronauts who want to travel to Mars need to remain in zero gravity conditions for months, and this will lower their muscle mass and bone density. On the contrary, the professor mentions previous experiences of astronauts staying several months in zero gravity conditions. In her view, there are a lot techniques that can be utilized to prevent health issues caused by zero gravity. As an example, she speaks about exercising which can keep the astronauts muscle mass high. In addition, the lecturer explains that taking some vitamins and calcium and regularly, consuming them can preserve the astronauts' bone density.
Finally, the text states that solar radiations cause a serious problem for astronauts. In contrast, the professor repudiates this claim by declaring that solar radiations are not dangerous all the time. They are sporadic. Some times the radiations exist and other times they are absent. Moreover, there are some kind of shelters which are not heavy that can be utilized. Thus, astronauts can rest under the shelters during times of severe solar radiation, and do their jobs while the radiations does not exist.
- In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. 11
- Young people enjoy life more than older people do. 73
- What celebrities state are of greater importance for young people rather than for older people. 76
- Rules concerning youth are too strict (TPO 52) 66
- The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...the lecture offer two opposing views on whether or not humans travel to Mars is possible. Whil...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of the problems stated in the reading. First, the passage claims that astronaut...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th which will perpetrate difficulties. Next, the reading states that astronauts...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... preserve the astronauts bone density. Finally, the text states that solar radi...
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Line 4, column 317, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'kinds'?
Suggestion: kinds
...ey are absent. Moreover, there are some kind of shelters which are not heavy that ca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, at least, in addition, in contrast, kind of, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1373.03311258 134% => OK
No of words: 363.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0826446281 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71736240976 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 145.348785872 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539944903581 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1998593529 49.2860985944 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 7.06452816374 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177317254227 0.272083759551 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475014783457 0.0996497079465 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474603456326 0.0662205650399 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105713277969 0.162205337803 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515538572582 0.0443174109184 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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