PT1 Independent
In my opinion, the bond between children and their parents is more important than anything else. Whether young adults live with their parents has a strong influence on the bond and I think the situation that young adults want to live with their families for a longer time is better for the following reasons.
To begin with, young adults can get advices from their families particularly from their parents. Because their parents live longer than their children, they are likely to know more important things. For example, when I was a high school student, I did't decide what to study in university. When I asked my parents how to decide the field I would major in, they adviced me to read many books. I followed that advice and eventually found the book on civil engineering. Thanks to the book, I learned how interesting it was to study a construction of bridges so I made a decision about my major. Without my parents' advice, I didn't read the book and couldn't decide what to study. This example clearly illustrates the importance of advices for young adults from their parents.
Moreover, young adults can notice an emergency of their families at home. The possibility for parents to face a danger is increased as they get older so children living with their parents is a good way to help them. Let me introduce an example to follow this point. In Japan, the number of old people who die at home is increasing. According to the research, the main reason of their death is that they can't go to a hospital immediately after an accident happens. They could survive if they lived with someone who could take them to a hospital. Young adults can play a significant role to save their families.
As I stated above, parents' help is essential for their children and vice versa. Therefore, I strongly stand by my opinion that it is a good situation that young adults prefer living with their families to living alone.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... my major. Without my parents advice, I didnt read the book and couldnt decide what t...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...rents advice, I didnt read the book and couldnt decide what to study. This example clea...
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Line 5, column 404, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...main reason of their death is that they cant go to a hospital immediately after an a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example, i think, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72023809524 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49957479377 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511904761905 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1638315819 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4736842105 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6842105263 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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