Some parents do not want their children to work part time while in school so that they can concentrate on their studies. Other parents believe their kids should learn to manage study and work duties as this teaches them certain skills they cannot learn at school and therefore better prepared them for the real world.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views.
In today’s highly competitive world, parents are trying their level best to provide best guidance to their children in terms of studies and work, which is a topic of contention among them, where some believe the focus should be just studies, others claim work is also important to help students get ready for the world. This essay will future explore the pros and cons of both the views.
The advantages of children just focusing on studies are, that this gives more mind space to children to comprehend their learning and get best grades, which are highly required to get admission in good universities. Moreover, students can explore different subjects from their curriculum to find their interest, helping them in making a right choice for their future. On the contrary, this approach limits their learning to a theoritical base only, as children do not get themselves updated by the needs of the professional world. This leads to create a gap between their school learnings and corporate world needs, making it difficult for students to face it in future.
The benefits of pupils working part time with their studies are: firstly, this approach allows them an opportunity to get their hands dirty on the field putting their school learnings into practise. Secondly, it also helps them to learn work - life balance right from the begining of their career; it makes them practically ready to face the challenges thrown by the professional world. On the other side, it takes away the golden period of childrens’ lives that is school life by putting a lot of pressure to work and study together. Also, it results in lowering the grades in school which sometimes lead to depression by creating a sense of failue in their mind.
To conclude, students can achieve higher grades and choose their career by their own by focusing on studies but also leads to a creation of gap between theoritical studies and professional needs. On the other side by working part time it gives them hands on experience of work but also takes away time from their studies, resulting lower marks in school.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: provide the best
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Suggestion: in the future
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Suggestion: part-time
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01704545455 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56066207563 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508522727273 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7563235368 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.166666667 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40958736502 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163598368169 0.084324248473 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075206829243 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274900133836 0.151304729494 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265241172334 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 9.78957915832 179% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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