"The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007." H.H.

Essay topics:

"The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007." H.H.

The graph demonstrates the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007. Between these years, teenagers tended to watch television more, while they ceased to do sports.
In 2002, teenagers spend 25 hours watching TV on average. After that, the number of hours they spend watching TV had increased gradually, and in 2007, they spend about 37.5 hours watching television. The hours for watching TV in 2007 is longer than that of 2002.
On the other hand, the number of hours teenagers spend doing sports had decreased from 2002 to 2007. In 2002, they did sports for 10 hours a week on average. However, the number of hours for doing sports had gradually decreased since 2002, and from 2005 to 2006, there was a rapid decrease. The hours of 2007 is one-fifth of that of 2002.
Overall, it can be said that teenagers come to watch TV more. Meanwhile, they do not spend more time doing sports than before.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'sport'
Suggestion: sport
...ed from 2002 to 2007. In 2002, they did sports for 10 hours a week on average. However...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 783.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71686746988 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31037251632 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 198.0 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0626968442 43.030603864 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.1818181818 112.824112599 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0909090909 22.9334400587 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36363636364 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343553136882 0.215688989381 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173716586112 0.103423049105 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13353496769 0.0843802449381 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232843824651 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10539044902 0.0819641961636 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 90.09 61.2550243902 147% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 10.3012195122 43% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.5 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.66 8.06136585366 83% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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