Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Art, as once the most prominent hallmarks of an era, has long fallen to the wayside. From the time of the ancient Greeks, through the Roman age, all the way into the Renaissance, these periods of time have always been epitomized by their art; the intricate and realistic Greek statues and temples, the grandeur of Roman architecture, the religious paintings of the Renaissance. Although their time periods sets them apart, one thing binds them together: the commonality that these works of art are all patronized by those in power.
In contrast to the styles that have set these time periods apart, art in the modern era has become obscure and synonymous with the elite. In an era where those with strong fists speak the loudest, art is looked down upon, and practitioners scorned. However, total war and further expansion of the military is unnecessary and unrealistic. A single missile can travel halfway across the globe and kill thousands. An all-out war between nuclear powers will end all humanity on earth.
If the military budget was to instead be used by the government to sponsor art, with a budget surpassing the military budget of the next 25 countries, there will be a new modern Renaissance. Art would regain popularity as a mainstream form of media, and would no longer be scorned upon. It would create a widespread boom in the economy in many different sectors, as artists would require not only equipment and materials, but a workplace, as well as places of inspiration to draw from. It would encourage conservation of both the landscape and of many different species. The arts not only encompasses painting, but also architecture. Funding will encourage the exploration of many different types of buildings and places to inhabit, some of which will help combat the increasingly hostile climate due to the current industries used for war.
To sum up, investment in the arts will not only mitigate the negative effects of the industry of war, but also be a boon to many aspects of the economy. While the military is important in tumultuous times, advancements in technology renders an insubordinate amount of investment superfluous.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, while, as to, in contrast, as well as, in contrast to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01675977654 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83828023841 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569832402235 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5140989936 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.25 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108428818646 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355943303586 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311512277643 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0680790366452 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227319236255 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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