The extended family is less important now than it was in the past.
Family is the building block of a society. With the evolution of time, the functions and size of a family has changed quite significantly. In the past, it was very common to find an extended family which is almost extinct in the current time. There are several reasons behind it which I agree with and my opinion is that extended family is of less importance than it was in the past.
In modern time, nuclear families are more prevalent. Nuclear family have many benefits over the extended family. In current era, the life has become more complex and people are very busy with their personal life in order to manage various aspects in their own life. Having an extended family means that one have to deal with additional responisibilities. This might not sound feasible in current time. There is also an economical benefit in having nuclear family. With the increased expense of leading life, extended family is tantammount to having additional cost. Although, an extended family may offers more mental and emotional support, but the economical aspect outweighs it in modern self-centered life style. For example, my father was brought up in an extended family. In his experience, the amount of people the grandfather has to feed was very large. It also put a pressure on my grandfather and my uncles did not contributed by the same amount to maintain the family. This sometimes led to disputes among the members and eventually my uncles broke off from the extended family and went to lead their own family life. This is a compelling reason for me to agree with the point in the statement.
Moreover, at present, people value privacy more than anything. In an extended family, it is very difficult to maintain ones private life due to the extensive exposure to the various family members which might not have been possible if they have lived apart. Another cruicial thing is that if an extended family doesn't have an specided figurehead, many disputes can arise. the reason behind this is that, everyone has their own opinion on which one tends to give more importance. If these numerous opinions contradict each other, this can result in serious dispute. For example, as once again my father was the primary bread earner of his family so my grandfather wanted to reward him by a piece of property, which my uncles did not agree with and caused problem in the family. Also, once my cousin failed in the exam, which his mother did not intended to divulge. But it got out by another member of the family which caused great mental distress on my cousin. This depicts the concern of lack of privacy. Thus is a very compelling reason behind my opinion.
Thus, from the discussion above, although extended families have some merit to it, it no longer of the much importance to the current reality and life style. Nuclear family has supplanted it due to a number of reasons like economic concerns, privacy concerns, life style, etc.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'contribute'
Suggestion: contribute
...on my grandfather and my uncles did not contributed by the same amount to maintain the fami...
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Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...amily, it is very difficult to maintain ones private life due to the extensive expos...
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Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ial thing is that if an extended family doesnt have an specided figurehead, many dispu...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ed figurehead, many disputes can arise. the reason behind this is that, everyone ha...
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Line 5, column 844, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'intend'
Suggestion: intend
...d in the exam, which his mother did not intended to divulge. But it got out by another m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2432.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83499005964 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53212271336 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457256461233 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9783483643 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8620689655 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3448275862 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267967446915 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797132902015 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980444174365 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208900601251 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133825219656 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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