TPO 30 question 2
<p class="MsoNormal">Job is one of the most important part of anybody's life. Everybody
has some vital reasons to do a job; such as making money for living, do job as
hobby or entertainment, or something else. Some people think it is better to
work all weekdays, while some other like me like to work only a part of
weekdays like three or four days. The following reasons will discuss my point
of view in details. <o:p></o:p></p><p class="MsoNormal">First of all, in this condition I have the best chance to
make the best work-life balance. I have a family who we love to spend a lot of
time with each other. When ever we are with each other doing even ordinary home
work, we feel it is the best time of our life. My wife and my 8 years old girl
love to spend time with me while I try to make a delicouis breakfast for them.
Actually, the saturday's pancake breakfast in ouyr house seems to be the most
memorable gathering in every week. My daughter asked me she wishes that I pick
her up from school cause in the way of home we make the funniest conversatiion
that we can have. These beautiful time that we experiwnced with each other
cann't repeat any more and we think they are the most valuable things that we
have. If I have the chance to stay home one or two days more in home, how much
more sparkling memory we will have with us. <o:p></o:p></p><p class="MsoNormal">Second, working two or three more hours in a working day
have some advantage for project and it will l lead to project done sooner. My
brother work in a computer company which give some coustomer services online
and for 24/7. He explaind to me that they work in long shift that take about 12
hours in a working day; however when he started this work he felt some how
boring for the first time but after a while he used to that and he is completly
constent and happy with his job circumestance. He says that his co-worker and
he not only don't get tired but alxo they are happy to give some help in some
times that their coustomers are overwhelmed at the hours out of the working
hours. He enthusiastically speaks about these kind of memories. I think this
filling motivate person to so his job more efficiently. <o:p></o:p></p><p class="MsoNormal">In conclusion, I totally agree with this propose that
working in long days and having one or two more day off make a better work-life
balance. This strategy provides several advantages like working with more focus
and passionately in the working days, and have a good and long weekends that
give you the best chance to do everything that you enjoy. It seems that each
job that has this potential that schadule long weedends for staff will be
accepted by a lot of worker.<o:p></o:p></p>
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hobby
...as making money for living, do job as hobby or entertainment, or something else. So...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Weekdays
...r like me like to work only a part of weekdays like three or four days. The following ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Of
...llowing reasons will discuss my point of view in details.
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Suggestion: Make
...s condition I have the best chance to make the best work-life balance. I have a fa...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Time
... family who we love to spend a lot of time with each other. When ever we are with ...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... spend a lot of time with each other. When ever we are with each other doing even ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Work
...h each other doing even ordinary home work, we feel it is the best time of our lif...
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Suggestion: Love
...life. My wife and my 8 years old girl love to spend time with me while I try to ma...
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Suggestion: Memorable
...st in ouyr house seems to be the most memorable gathering in every week. My daughter as...
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Suggestion: That
...me we make the funniest conversatiion that we can have. These beautiful time that ...
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Suggestion: Have
... are the most valuable things that we have. If I have the chance to stay home one ...
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Suggestion: More
...ne or two days more in home, how much more sparkling memory we will have with us. ...
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Suggestion: Have
... or three more hours in a working day have some advantage for project and it will ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...h give some coustomer services online and for 24/7. He explaind to me that they w...
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Line 43, column 67, Rule ID: SOME_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somehow'?
Suggestion: somehow
...wever when he started this work he felt some how boring for the first time but after a...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Constent
...e he used to that and he is completly constent and happy with his job circumestance. H...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ys that his co-worker and he not only dont get tired but alxo they are happy to gi...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hours
...elmed at the hours out of the working hours. He enthusiastically speaks about these...
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Line 53, column 41, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...hours. He enthusiastically speaks about these kind of memories. I think this filling mot...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Filling
... these kind of memories. I think this filling motivate person to so his job more effi...
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Suggestion: Balance
... more day off make a better work-life balance. This strategy provides several advanta...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Give
...nd have a good and long weekends that give you the best chance to do everything th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2360.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83606557377 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.66050778169 2.67179642975 137% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481557377049 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1194264783 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.380952381 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2380952381 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 33.0 4.53405017921 728% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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