toefl integrated writing task
Author of the passage and lecturer have differing opinions about the accuracy and reliability of Chevalier's memoir. While the text says that Chevalier distorted many events and facts to make memoir interesting, lecturer provides enough shreds of shreds of evidence to negotiate the claims that memoir was inaccurate.
Text says that though Chevalier invested money in gambling, he borrowed it from the merchants. Lecturer denies it by saying Chevalier has a lot of wealth. He borrowed the money because he did not have enough amount of liquid money. It took time for him to convert his wealth to money.
Though the text agrees that Chevalier and Voltaire met regularly and conversed, it says conversations written were inaccurate due to the long gap that he took to include them in the memoir. But lecturer differs with it. Lecturer says that Chevalier used to write notes every night about the conversation between him and Volatire and kept those notes with him for many years. So, lecturer evidently points out that Chevalier consulted his notes before writing about the conversation in his memoir.
While the author of the passage claims that Chevalier escaped from the prison by bribing the officials, lecturer disagrees with it by saying there are many people in prison who had better political connections than Chevalier and they could not escape from the prison by bribing. Even the government records of venice recorded that ceiling of climbing was repaired which provides evidence to say Chevalier broke the ceiling with the metal piece.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'shreds of'.
Suggestion: shreds of
...r interesting, lecturer provides enough shreds of shreds of evidence to negotiate the claims that m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 42, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hough the text agrees that Chevalier and Voltaire met regularly and conversed, it...
^^
Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e ceiling with the metal piece.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1322.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 252.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24603174603 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54322669371 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5151362414 49.2860985944 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.166666667 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 7.06452816374 21% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.024060927519 0.272083759551 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0100965362468 0.0996497079465 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0227075262621 0.0662205650399 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0137235677314 0.162205337803 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237699165718 0.0443174109184 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.