TPO 30 Integrated Writing
A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a “burning mirror”: a polished copper surface curved to focus the Sun’s rays onto Roman ships, causing them to catch fire. However, we have several reasons to suspect that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and the Greeks of Syracuse never really built such a device.
The reading claims the greek an ingenious weapon called a burning mirror is only a myth and never built. The author elaborates his viewpoints by providing three main reasons. Nevertheless, the professor believes that it may be bulit and was practical; so, refutes each of the author's stand-points.
First, the reading avers that the ancient greek did not have such a advanced technology becuase it needs a very precise parabolic curvature for manufacturing copper sheets. However, the professor refutes this concept by stating that they did <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">not </span> need single copper to manufacturing the weapon, and could be some pieces of mirors in order to parabolic th ships.
Furthermore, the article asserts that the weapon required a very long time about 10 minute and ships did<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> </span><span style="font-size: 19.36px;">not</span> move to weapon become practical and effective for woody ships. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up the fact that not all parts of the ship made from wood and indicates to the sticky part which called pitche which is easily set on fire in seconds. In addition, she states that it could be impacted even on the moving ships.
Finally, the article posits that same technology like flaming arrows which set ships on fire from exact distance and power; hence, the did<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> </span><span style="font-size: 19.36px;">not</span> need extra technology. Contrary, the lecturer casts doubt on this claim by stating that enemies were familar with flaming arrows and saw the arrows and put them off gradually. Also, she states that the burning mirror technology would unobserving and set the ships on fire at seconds whithout knowing it was coming and could increase fears on enemies perfectly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hat the ancient greek did not have such a advanced technology becuase it needs a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, may, nevertheless, second, so, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64056939502 5.08290768461 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.90953733999 2.5805825403 151% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5871886121 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4222427708 49.2860985944 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.090909091 110.228320801 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5454545455 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1818181818 7.06452816374 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237853273816 0.272083759551 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101887447223 0.0996497079465 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928355913126 0.0662205650399 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149979065029 0.162205337803 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338491252535 0.0443174109184 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.3589403974 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.2367328918 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27 Out of 30
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