TPO-21 Integrated Writing
Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, grow faster, or withstand adverse conditions. Planting genetically modified trees on a large scale promises to bring a number of benefits.
First, genetically modified trees are designed to be hardier than nature trees; that is, they are more likely to survive than their unmodified counterparts. In Hawaii, for example, a new pest-resistant species of papaya trees has been developed in response to ring spot virus infections that have repeatedly damaged the native papaya tree population. Planting the genetically modified papayas has largely put an end to the ringspot problem.
Moreover, genetically modified trees promise to bring a number of economic benefits to those who grow them. Genetically modified trees tend to grow faster, give greater yields of food, fruit, or other products and be hardier. This allows tree farmer to get faster and greater returns on their farming investment and save on pesticides as well.
Finally, the use of genetically modified trees can prevent overexploitation of wild trees. Because of the growing demand for firewood and building timber, many forests around the world are being cut down faster than they can be replaced. Introducing genetically modified trees,designed for fast growth and high yield in given geographic conditions,would satisfy the demand for wood in many of those areas and save the endangered native trees, which often include unique or rare species.
The author believes that the genetical modification have a lot of environmental and economical merits. Supporting his opinion, he provides three reasons. The lecturer, however, rejects the arguments as follows.
To begin with the author of the reading passage asserts that the genetically
modified trees are more likely to survive in adverse conditions. this, however, is rebutted by the professor, arguing that among the natural trees there are a lot of variety which could make them able resist in different type of harsh climatic conditions; however the modified tree might be from a singl type. that could be very harmful for the trees because they are more uniform; thus, in a very bad condition they are more likely to compeletely wipe out. this is clearly in direct contradiction to what the reading passage mentioned about resistancy of modified trees.
In addition, unlike the writer who mentioned that the modified trees bring a greater economical profites for farmer who plant them. due to the fact that they grow faster and give more products such as fruits and wood, the lecturer is of the opinion that inversely, these kind of trees take more costs for farmer because the companies sell their seeds more expensive than wild trees' seeds. Furthermore, for each plantation time the farmers have to pay to the companies. this is in sharp contrast to the reading reasoning regarding the economical advantages of the modification of the trees.
Finally, while the author states that due to the increasing demanding for timbers and firewood, the genetically modified trees can solve the overexplotation problem of wild trees, the lecturer refutes this claim and points out that these new type of trees can, on the conterary, harm the invironment because they compete with wild trees for nutrients and water. they can easily crowed over the forests. this is yet another blow to the integrity of the argument put forth by the author of the reading passage.
For these reasons, the lecturer dismisses the author's arguments as unconvincing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, thus, while, in addition, kind of, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 334.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15269461078 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68958946652 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 145.348785872 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535928143713 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.3256246518 49.2860985944 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.733333333 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420397890242 0.272083759551 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116226489063 0.0996497079465 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101391382829 0.0662205650399 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173652930469 0.162205337803 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118178101828 0.0443174109184 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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