An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The argument claims that by introducing a new product and patronizing its well development a certain organization can help eradicate vitamin A deficiency among the people of Tagus- an impecunious nation constantly fighting with nutrition- is mostly flawed as it provides mostly unwarranted assertion.
Firstly, the argument is certain that a new breed of millet which is recently engineered by genetics engineer can circumvent the problematic issues- regarding on Vitamin A - of tagus. However, the argument failed to consider the fact that most newly developed bio technology can become virulent even though it may seem benign at a certain point. To be more specific there might be a bio hazard if the newly engineered millet is proven to be detrimental instead of flourishing. In that case the problem will remain constant and the government will have to deal with the full uncommon problem.
Secondly, the the argument has taken the habit of the individuals of Tagus as granted that they will cope with the developed breed of millet as it is the staple food of their habitat. Even if millet is the main food for the inveterate consumer, it doesn't prove that a sudden change of the product wont change their habit. Without conforming the people of tagus that the new product wont do harm of their previous taste and they can easily adopt wirh their habit just like the previous one, the writer can not be fully aware of the fact that people will adopt with the newly developed breed. Many consumer products has been failed to introduce new product to the market because the lack considering its effect to the public. If the argument provides the certain conformation of newly developed product will easily approved by the general public then we can be confirmed that the Vitamin A problem will be expunged.
Finally, By subsidize farmers to encourage growing the new type of millet is gratuitous, as it firstly claims that new type costs more. It haven't given any firm logic that how much amount could be saved by the farmers if they stick to the new species. Moreover, it didn't give any connection to the previous cost of the undeveloped millet so it is totally futile to claim that after the government subsidy the farmers will be totally motivated to adopt with the new millet. The argument could be more logical if it provided the prove that the farmers have made profit by the newly developed seed.
In conclusion, the argument has failed to pervade adequate information to make the claim more rigid.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 429 350
No. of Characters: 2049 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.551 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.776 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.547 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... the full uncommon problem. Secondly, the the argument has taken the habit of the ind...
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Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... the full uncommon problem. Secondly, the the argument has taken the habit of the ind...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 249, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...in food for the inveterate consumer, it doesnt prove that a sudden change of the produ...
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Line 5, column 725, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...k considering its effect to the public. If the argument provides the certain confo...
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Line 5, column 814, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'approve'
Suggestion: approve
... of newly developed product will easily approved by the general public then we can be co...
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Line 5, column 830, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ped product will easily approved by the general public then we can be confirmed that the Vitam...
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Line 7, column 140, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...tly claims that new type costs more. It havent given any firm logic that how much amou...
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Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... stick to the new species. Moreover, it didnt give any connection to the previous cos...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 524, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nt could be more logical if it provided the prove that the farmers have made profit by th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91079812207 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59982064769 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476525821596 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.7209152097 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.466666667 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373312056985 0.218282227539 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125027139942 0.0743258471296 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757823344222 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187702542485 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089353491008 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 12.3882235529 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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