The chart below gives information about the percentage of the adults who were overweight in four different countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000.Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below gives information about the percentage of the adults who were overweight in four different countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Kamal1993 on Sat, 11/02/2019 - 00:42

The bar graph illustrates the information in terms of proportion about the youngsters which were suffering from obesity which was in two decades in four various nations (Japan, Finland, Australia and USA) from 1980 to 2000.

In overall, the America constituted a major for fat young people where least overweight adults in Japan. However, there were lots of transformation can be noticed in an amount of obese young ones in all regions over the periods.

It can be seen from the information that the United State America was most popular for overweight adults which accounted at 15% during 1980.

Likewise, the percentage of Americans obese youngsters had experienced a rise to one in ten after one decade and it reached to peak level at more than a third in 2000. Similarly, the number of fat adults were found at 5 to 10% respectively during 1980, 1990 and 2000 in Finland.

The graph further proves that the lowest percentage of obese young people were searched in Japan which was never grow up at nearly 5% in given time periods. Even though, in 1980, there were one in ten overweight youngsters in Australia. In addition to this, an increase of 2% can be observed at 12% in 1990. Lastly, Australian obese adults experienced a two fold incline to more than a fifth in the end of the period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'where the least'.
Suggestion: where the least
...onstituted a major for fat young people where least overweight adults in Japan. However, th...
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Line 15, column 114, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'grown'.
Suggestion: grown
... were searched in Japan which was never grow up at nearly 5% in given time periods. ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, lastly, likewise, similarly, third, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 965.302439024 112% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79646017699 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64837332621 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557522123894 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6015257943 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185008594257 0.215688989381 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768391114951 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461326794114 0.0843802449381 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108985842656 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221324002403 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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