The given argument is initiated by claming that highest levels for students can be achieved by changing the policy from half-day kindergarten to full day-kindergarten at Greenwood School.
The given argument is initiated by claming that highest levels for students can be achieved by changing the policy from half-day kindergarten to full day-kindergarten at Greenwood School. This hypothesis is further corroborated by adding some plausible corriculam and seating changes in the school. The assumptions and facts given are convincing and pursuasive for a reader to assume that the claim is correct. However, after a careful scrutiny, there are several aspects to be considered before implementing the full-day kindergarten over the half-day kindergarten.
Firstly, the school management should consider that they are dealing with infants. If the kindergarten is full day where they are completely indulged into studying things, it will completely boring for them to concentrate not because of boring classes, but because of the nature at their age. In general, kindergarten going kinds are more playful and jovial and not very concerned about the studying things. Secondly, the management stated that there exists three categories of students namely, high-achieving, low-achieving and average students but not mentioned how this has been evaluted. It is very difficult to decide on kids intellectual capabilities. Even if they have an assessment, its not fair to implant the discrimination in their brains at the early stages of the life. It can have very adverse effects on kid's psychological growth. Thirdly, the management decided to mix the students according to their perfomances in a very naive way. If the assumption that high-achieving students help the rest of the students to improve, it is very bad for the average perfoming students as there is no help given to them from the high-achieving students.
Fourthly, the same material is going to be covered in a full day fashion than the existing half day fashion but in a lower speed. If the material is made for half-day for kindergarten going students, it will much boring and irritating for them to read them whole day. Instead, they can introduce some other experiments or some better workouts for the low achieving students to reduce the learing differences. Finally, it is very unlikely that all the students will find music and physical education very interesting to pursue. Instead, it will be really grate if they can go with the students' interests.
Therefore, considering all the aforesaid statements, it is clearly visiable that proposed solution by the Greenwood School is ineffective and hence, can be improved alot for better shaping the future of the kindergaten going students. One of major loop holes is that keeping a kid in a structured place does not garuntee the benefits, instead it can lead to many mental problems. Hence, the possibiliy of employing a full day kindergarten plan is questionable in raising the student achieving capabilities.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2341 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.179 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.986 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.524 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.404 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.463 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en argument is initiated by claming that highest levels for students can be achie...
^^
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thesis is further corroborated by adding some plausible corriculam and seating ch...
^^
Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'bore'
Suggestion: bore
...nto studying things, it will completely boring for them to concentrate not because of ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30530973451 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07053105762 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515486725664 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6097320329 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.19047619 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5238095238 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.533890987843 0.218282227539 245% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143199477877 0.0743258471296 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208026603154 0.0701772020484 296% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.350671904687 0.128457276422 273% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.216232931402 0.0628817314937 344% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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