TPO23 - Integrated TOEFL essay
The reading passage states that, the number of yellow cedar that is common in north america, have been decreasing because of three reasons. However, the professor in the lecture rejects the points made in the reading, and he says, we still do not know anything about main reasons to kill this types of tree.
First, considering the reading, insect parasites like the cedar bark beetle affect yellow cedar to decline. Actually, the beetle attacks the yellow cedar and eat the wood, so it causes killing the tree. In contrast, the professor in the lecture, refuses the idea and further explains that, this kind of trees is too strong, and healthy yellow cedar can resist more than other trees because they have a powerfull chemical on their surface. Also, beetle just can attack damage one.
Second, the reading passage claims that, brown bears that claw the cedars to eat the tree bark can damage them to decline. In contrary, the professor in the lecture rejects the information presented in the article, and makes the point that, yellow cedars in all across the north america have been declining, and in the Island there is not any evidence of brown bear, but yellow cedars that there, are declining too. In this case, we can not say brown bears can be responsibly to decline them.
Third, the author in the reading, puts forward the idea that the changes climate have effect on yellow cedars, and they will freezing in cold weather. On the other hand, the professor in the lecture contradicts the idea, and adds that, most yellow trees in low elavation with warm weather have been declining, so the cold weather can not be responsible to decline cedars.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... not know anything about main reasons to kill this types of tree. First, consi...
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Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'changes'' or 'change's'?
Suggestion: changes'; change's
...reading, puts forward the idea that the changes climate have effect on yellow cedars, a...
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Line 9, column 126, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'freeze'
Suggestion: freeze
... effect on yellow cedars, and they will freezing in cold weather. On the other hand, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, second, so, still, third, in contrast, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22395254272 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519298245614 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.51434878587 462% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.3980808595 49.2860985944 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.454545455 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 21.698381199 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422608311026 0.272083759551 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178731413204 0.0996497079465 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651172110092 0.0662205650399 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259650677058 0.162205337803 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836290691304 0.0443174109184 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 53.8541721854 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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