The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The three pie charts describe proportion of money, which were expenditured on the five different necessities in some private UK school during the twenty years, from 1981 to 2001.
It is clear that, overall, the greatest part of all spendings belonged to the teachers' salaries. It should also be noted that, the expenditure on insurance were lowest during the given two decades.
According to the pie charts, on 1981 40% of the total consumption were spent on teachers' salaries, while spending on the same expenditure in 1991 were higher at 50%.
When it comes to the expenditures on insurance and resources, over the next decade the patterns of each consumption were the same, but relevant figures were a couple percentage points higher, from 2% in 1981 to 3% in 1991, and 15% to 20 for resources. The other three annual spendings declined, from 28% to 22% for other workers' salaries, from 15% to 5% for furniture and equipment.
Between 1991 and 2001, about a half (45%) of the total school spending were still teachers' salaries. Another 8% made up by insurance pays, this is closely followed by spending on resources 9%.
The fugure for furniture increased significantly from 5% to 23% between 1991 and 2001 respectively, while expenditure on other workers' salaries dropped markedly from 22% in 1991 to 15% in 2001.
All in all, despite fluctuating of figure for teachers' salaries, there were stayed fairly constant during the whole given period, while spending on insurance were minimal.
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Sentence: According to the pie charts, on 1981 40 of the total consumption were spent on teachers' salaries, while spending on the same expenditure in 1991 were higher at 50.
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Sentence: When it comes to the expenditures on insurance and resources, over the next decade the patterns of each consumption were the same, but relevant figures were a couple percentage points higher, from 2 in 1981 to 3 in 1991, and 15 to 20 for resources.
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Sentence: Between 1991 and 2001, about a half 45 of the total school spending were still teachers' salaries.
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Sentence: The three pie charts describe proportion of money, which were expenditured on the five different necessities in some private UK school during the twenty years, from 1981 to 2001.
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Sentence: The fugure for furniture increased significantly from 5 to 23 between 1991 and 2001 respectively, while expenditure on other workers' salaries dropped markedly from 22 in 1991 to 15 in 2001.
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When it comes to the expenditures on insurance and resources, over the next decade the patterns of each consumption were the same, but relevant figures were a couple percentage points higher, from 2% in 1981 to 3% in 1991, and 15% to 20 for resources. The other three annual spendings declined, from 28% to 22% for other workers' salaries, from 15% to 5% for furniture and equipment.
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