Developing an industry is more important than saving the environment for endangered species. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Use specific details and examples to support your answer.
Our word is in crisis mode. We are abusing our environment, destroying our forest, killing the habitat of millions of species around the world. I strongly disagree with the idea that industries are more important than saving species that are about to get extinct.
First, let’s take, for example, the Amazon jungle. The amazon is the habitat of such a huge amount of diverse life that we need to protect no matter what. In addition, there are species of all kinds of organisms that we do not even know they exist there. We all should be protesting by how the Brazilian government is devastating the forest, burning and cutting down huge amounts of land, in order to make room for farmers to grow soya beans to sell to developing countries. What will happen in fifty years' time when the Amazonian forest disappeared? Industries will not be as important then, but if we do not take action now the Amazonian and all its habitat will vanish.
Moreover, the knowledge found especially in ancient plants in the Amazonian could lead us to the cure of many diseases among them cancer. In the amazonian, there are vast amounts of endangered medical plants that can save us from killings illnesses like SIDA or cancer. In order for us to get to know the secrets of the plants, we need to preserve them. In addition, we should be talking to the locals that have already the knowledge to try to re-discover this lost memory of the world.
Lastly, we cannot allow ourselves to continue to destroy endangered species like the African rhino for the sake of some cultures to use their horns as a powerful stimulant. Not only the African rhino is losing its habitat due to the extension of farming land by locals. But by the infamous power, its horn has on the testosterone level on men in some cultures.
All in all, if we don’t save our endangered species like the ones in the Amazonian or the African rhino, our world is going t be a very sad place to live in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[4]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
... kinds of organisms that we do not even know they exist there. We all should be prot...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as important 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...d? Industries will not be as important then, but if we do not take action now the A...
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Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f the plants, we need to preserve them. In addition, we should be talking to the l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, moreover, so, then, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62962962963 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5140928745 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547008547009 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6293462501 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5882352941 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115511593609 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379131121872 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599531729337 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0647908307163 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357484282017 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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