Children watch too much television nowadays and this is bad for their education and development. How far do you agree with this statement?
In recent years, because of the boom of new-cutting edge technology, metropolis children have a great chance to contact with it during the early days of a child. As a result, the majority of people think that there are a wide range of serious aspects not only for education but also for development of children. From my view, television has affected them in both of sides
On the one hand, I agree that excessive watching is detrimental to children education and psychological development. First of all, that children spend too much time on TV compared to other activities leads to the neglect of studying. As a consequence, their study is likely to decrease and even worse, they may be kicked out of school. Second, being more involved in inappropriate programs is associated with several negative effects regarding psychological development like violence, depression and autism. In addition, sitting in front of the TV for a long time can cause many serious illnesses, such as obesity or myopia. This can place a financial burden not only on their family but also on the society.
On the other hand, there are some undeniable evidences that prove a wide range of benefits of television. The reason for my view is that the number of knowledges in 21st century comes not only from school or family, but also from digital equipment like television or internet. For example, children can determine various soft skills like problem solving skill, communication skill or survival skill throughout documentaries or real shows on TV. In addition, based on some report sciences on TV, children can wide their know-how to develop their physical and mental well-being; for instance, “remember drink at least 2 litres water per day for the smooth metabolism in the body” or “how to be careful and pay attention when you hang out at night since you may deal with some evil social”
In conclusion, constant parental guidance is proven to be beneficial to children who watch TV to gain more useful knowledge for themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, regarding, second, so, well, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08011869436 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89781109199 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605341246291 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.436568225 49.4020404114 215% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 142.666666667 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.1666666667 7.06120827912 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249047551128 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743096677492 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551501629257 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134947485367 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039264532002 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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