The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

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The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The line graph compires the number of male and female students studying it at university from 1985-2015. The amount of pupils who learning computer programming divided 2 categories:males and females.

Overall,it can be seen that there was increase of the amount of boys from 1985 till 2015.Girls risen dramatically from 1990 to 2010,then decreased.

In 1990 this was 5000 students,line climbed to 13000 in 1995.During 10 years this line increased normally with 27000 pupils.Then in 2015 it became 40000 male students who were studying at university.

If we talk about the girls' indicator,this raised between 30 years.Because in 1985 it was 2000 and in 1995 it rised and became 32000.During 5 years the number female students declined this was about 29000 pupils in 2015.But females reached a peak with 40000 students.

Generally,the graph shows that the number of two genders attained had a greater impact on people's education to computer programming in the past than more recently.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eased. In 1990 this was 5000 students,line climbed to 13000 in 1995.During 10 year...
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...ne increased normally with 27000 pupils.Then in 2015 it became 40000 male students w...
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...g at university. If we talk about the girls indicator,this raised between 30 years....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 837.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33121019108 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0602029977 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.643312101911 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4116141419 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 5.23603664747 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236438639521 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13572801376 0.103423049105 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148902202928 0.0843802449381 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131288686365 0.15604864568 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862186774578 0.0819641961636 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.2329268293 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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