You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.Explain where and when you left itSay what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.

Explain where and when you left it

Say what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir / Madam,

My name is Ahmed Karem, and I am a frequent traveller on your train. I would like to inform you about the loss of my bag on one of your trains, which is a valuable gift from my father.

On Thursday the 15th of January on train number 55 route B, heading from Cairo to Alexandria. When I was going to my office on your train, I had a phone call which distracted me; I probably left the bag on seat number 45C. It was a black leather bag with a silver belt which contains my personal laptop plus my wallet including my credit card and valuable items.

I would be grateful, if you could help me to find my bag by taking the required action in such cases. I also request to contact the railway staff, who were on duty during that time; moreover, hanging a notice with the bag’s description would be useful.

I am looking forward to hearing from you and thank you in advance for your anticipated support. Should there be any queries, kindly contact me on 95782521.

Faithfully yours,

Ahmed Karem

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 35, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...s. I would be grateful, if you could help me to find my bag by taking the required action in...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...'s description would be useful. I am looking forward to hearing from you ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 841.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 189.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44973544974 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39412947763 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650793650794 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9491058541 44.8134815571 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145077609156 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589785788752 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563136121097 0.0603063233224 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989745803547 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310116926044 0.0580467560999 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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