In many countries ,average life expectancy is increasing.
is generally noticed that greater longevity is prevalent among people in different parts around the world. Although this phenomenon might have some advantages, I am inclined to believe that its drawbacks are far more than its merits.
On the one hand, there are two social merits that long life span can offer for both seniors and their families. First, for the elderly people, as they can enjoy the company of their beloved ones for much longer time, consequently, this would immensely load their times with pleasant moments leading to strengthening the bonds between family members. In addition, families would greatly benefit from the wisdom and experience of their senior members; they can seek their guidance throughout different life aspects.
On the other hand, although the mentioned advantages, I am still convinced that the demerits of longevity outweigh the merits for a couple of reasons. To begin with, long life span would burden the shoulders of the governments with more expenses. To illustrate, more welfare funds will be needed if people are living for longer years. This year, the NHS has announced that 10 billion Euros had to be added to cover the medical insurance of people above 65 in the past 10 years. Another drawback is the shortage of job vacancies, as senior citizens would still be occupying their positions at their work leaving young people jobless. This trend is significantly escalating the unemployment rates among young people, which is adding an extra effort on the government.
To conclude, despite the positive impact on society in terms of tightens family bonds, I hold the notion that longevity has substantially dire impacts that outweigh the positive ones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
is generally noticed that greater longevit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, so, still, then, in addition, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17391304348 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60407198946 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61231884058 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9739498507 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0323386336249 0.244688304435 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0134890664625 0.084324248473 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.023514925295 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0149869592188 0.151304729494 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168181494024 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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