Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attraction To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98422712934 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64275001011 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507886435331 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2097709852 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7777777778 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6111111111 20.7667163134 85% => OK
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Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4927062136 0.244688304435 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161527293888 0.084324248473 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152459629904 0.0667982634062 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273798980246 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.273970759293 0.056905535591 481% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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It is sometimes argued that tourists from overseas should be charged more than local residents to visit important sites and monuments. I completely disagree with this idea.

The argument in favour of higher prices for foreign tourists would be that cultural or historical attractions often depend on state subsidies to keep them going, which means that the resident population already pays money to these sites through the tax system. However, I believe this to be a very shortsighted view. Foreign tourists contribute to the economy of the host country with the money they spend on a wide range of goods and services, including food, souvenirs, accommodation and travel. The governments and inhabitants of every country should be happy to subsidise important tourist sites and encourage people from the rest of the world to visit them.

If travellers realised that they would have to pay more to visit historical and cultural attractions in a particular nation, they would perhaps decide not to go to that country on holiday. To take the UK as an example, the tourism industry and many related jobs rely on visitors coming to the country to see places like Windsor Castle or Saint Paul’s Cathedral. These two sites charge the same price regardless of nationality, and this helps to promote the nation’s cultural heritage. If overseas tourists stopped coming due to higher prices, there would be a risk of insufficient funding for the maintenance of these important buildings.

In conclusion, I believe that every effort should be made to attract tourists from overseas, and it would be counterproductive to make them pay more than local residents.

Tourism is a flourishing industry. People who love to travel go over vast distances to see and appreciate foreign cultures and historical monuments. Some people are of the view that tourists from other countries should be charged more than the local natives for their visits. I, however, do not agree with this opinion.

Local visitors who have grown up and lived their lives surrounded by the cultural values and historic places do not have much appreciation for them. They do not give a lot of importance to this rich heritage and take it for granted. So, there is no reason to give them access at nominal prices.

By contrast, many foreign tourists have a real interest and admiration for other cultures and it is unfair to ask them to pay more for access to historical places. They travel thousands of miles and spend a lot of money to visit foreign countries. If these foreigners were to pay more than the locals, it would only discourage them from making a visit. Therefore, in my opinion, governments should charge the same fee from both international tourists and local visitors.

By doing so, authorities can encourage the international tourists to pay more visits, which will lead to the further development of the tourism industry. This will also make the local visitors realise and appreciate the importance of their cultural heritage. When people from across the globe can spend loads of money to see and admire their heritage, locals have no reason not to pay a visit.

In conclusion, I believe that the foreign tourists should pay the same, if not less, than the locals. When natives see foreigners flocking to their historical attractions, they will also be encouraged to do so.