Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
In today's world, arts and sports are important parts of any society, but one of them should be preponderant. Personally, I believe that the authorities should spend more funding for athletics. I feel this way for three main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, athletics of the nation that supports the sports tend to have prowess in the games. The more skillful the sportsmen is, the more opportunity to establish sports event will be in the region. We should not forget that sports can be profitable for the nations' economy. Sport events and activities are lucrative for the nation because countries can take advantage on the ticket of sport event, and market of products related to the games such as selling costumes. Therefore, countries can make profit by expending more money on the athletics. To be more specific, several years ago, United Kingdom made Olympics in their country, and consume magnitude of budget for the event. Even though the regime sacrificed great extent of funding for the stadium and other service process, they could benefit from the tourists' purchasing of local products and tickets, and even renewed the area from impoverished to flourished.
Secondly, Nowadays, individuals must have money in order to survive, which signifies that they will be loath to involve in the activities from which they cannot earn money, If the authorities endorse the athletics in satisfactory extent, young people will be inspired to train for the sports and become sportsmen. Hence, their health will be improved because they will perform exercises for their aimed achievements. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Few years ago, I wanted to become footballer because I thought that my skill is adequate. Afterwards, I realized that football players in Mongolia, my native country, do not earn enough money. Thus, I ignored my childhood dream, and stopped rehearsing, which is the reason why my health became impoverished. Drawing from my own experience, if regime endows the athletics, young people will be encouraged to include in the sport activities because they can be sure that it can be possible livelihood.
Finally, some artists have negative effect on the society, especially some rappers and rock musicians. There are several expletive, and words which may corrupt youth in their songs' lyrics. Hence, adolescences may consider these harmful inspirations agreeable. On the other hand, there is no downside in the sports. For example, Mongolian rapper Gee mentioned that young people should not be educated but strong enough to fight. Afterwards, many Mongolian teenagers started being less studious than previous time, and body of crimes done by juveniles increased in my country.
In summation, I am of the opinion of countries should expend relatively larger amount of funding for the sport players than arts. This is because region can benefit from matters related to sports, youth will improve their health condition because they will be willing to involve in sport activities, and sports have no drawbacks and corruption on public.
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- TPO 21 Integrated essay 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...t that sports can be profitable for the nations economy. Sport events and activities ar...
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Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'expletives'?
Suggestion: expletives
...s and rock musicians. There are several expletive, and words which may corrupt youth in t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2633.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25548902196 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70836733927 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530938123752 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.315264005 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.32 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.04 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0892239225199 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302610167671 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359294831595 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.05430901329 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317950686288 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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