A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.
A person is said to be a criminal when he/she commits any action which is against the law.The criminal activity can be judged on the various events committed by the person.The right of judgement about whether any civil rights or any rights for that matter should be with the concerned authorities , these judgements should not be affected by the consensus of common people. I disagree with the conclusion that the author is trying to make that the criminals should be deprived of any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor for the following reasons.
Firstly, every person is unique in is his personality and skill set . Likewise every criminal is different based on the crime that they have committed.For instance , a person who has committed murder should not the compared with a person who has committed a petty theft such as pickpocketting.Both of these scenarios are consider to be against the norms of law but should both of these be treated equally ?.The depravity of rights from the former seems more likely than the latter.Therefore the author must be more specific about the criminal activities and should not generalize about everyone.
Secondly,it is observed that a person is taught all the good qualities and activites while the bad ones are learnt by himself.A person commits crime based on the situation he/she is in. There are people who preach about religion and let others believe that a certain crime can help their community and lead them to a path for heaven.These are the terrorist organizations which brainwash people into believing that their religion will thrive when some other religion gets bombasted.These people who are brainwashed might inherently be good , they might choose this path because of a myriad of difficulties faced by their surroundings. Hence, these type of people should be able to start their lives again as a normal human being and should not be depraved of any rights.
Finally,their are many people who commit heinous acts which cannot be forgiven.These type of people who have a track record of committting such harm to society definitely don't deserve any kinds of rights.A person who knowingly and repeatedly commits crimes that harm the society should be banished from the society.Since the fear of knowing that these people still roam around us would create a very hostile environment around many people and they would not be able to live with freedom and safety.
In sum,a person should be depraved of his rights by judging both his past and present scenarios.Also the author should not generalize about the retainment of rights for all the criminals, he should have been more specific about the type of crimes.Morever the people who do knowingly and repeatedly commit these kind of crimes should definitely be depraved of all kinds of rights otherwise it would be the common people who will get depraved of their rights.
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also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 484.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01446280992 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78352542772 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462809917355 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 53.0 23.0359550562 230% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 163.981329862 60.3974514979 272% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 269.666666667 118.986275619 227% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 53.7777777778 23.4991977007 229% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.8888888889 5.21951772744 285% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 7.80617977528 384% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33976089533 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170165598505 0.0831039109588 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103587820073 0.0758088955206 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213363558984 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090593521044 0.0667264976115 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.1 14.1392134831 206% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 17.68 48.8420337079 36% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 12.1743820225 197% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.67 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.8971910112 223% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.2 11.2143820225 207% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 11.7820224719 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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