"The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors:
"Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over 80 percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite provider & would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now."" -
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice & the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
The argument presented here makes a few basic faults while making assumptions while devising the argument. These faults are detrimental to the overall effect of the argument.
Firstly, the author's blatant support of Techcorporation is based on the fact that its a new entry into the market of satellite technology development in a considerable length of time and is hence breaking the monopoly. This is no basis for declaring that Techcorporation will necessarily be more, or as successful as, the current leader in that market. Just because its breaking the monopoly, it doesn't mean that it ...
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Sentence: Instead of giving such erroneous advice, the author should have analysed his assumptions & logic while making the argument.
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