In many places, people's lifestyles are changing very rapidly, and this is affecting family relationships. Do you think the advantages of this development outweighs the disadvantages?
In the 21 century’s years, It would be hard to deny that the advent of modern technology has caused significant changes to human’s life. (However) These changes also lead to many conflicting perspectives about whether or not they have a strong influence on family relationships. In my opinion, while a new lifestyle brings us many wonderful things that we have not seen before, its disadvantages are far more significant, especially with family relationships.
On the one hand, the world seems to be busier than ever when people always pay a lot of attention to their mobile tools which play an important role in their works and daily life. Everyday, people rush to work from the early morning to the late night in order to raise the family income because of high standard living in a modern life. After work, they stay at home with a laptop or a phone to continue with their unfinished work or focus on social media. Moreover, most children nowadays are regularly left to their own devices instead of taking care of their parents like before. As a result, family members have a growing tendency to have their own life and spend less time together.
Secondly, while the developed world permits youngsters to pursue new lifestyles with new traditions, new jobs or new fashion, the old ones still maintain (keep) their old thoughts and always think of the past. Therefore, sometimes new people’s lifestyles conflict with the other one due to many differences in life.
In conclusion, I believe that the impacts of our changing lifestyles will incalculably damage family relationships if people can not control their life effectively in front of many problems. Therefore, we should balance personal life and family with intelligence.
- It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university Do the advantages of having a year off outweigh the disadvantages 73
- In many places people s lifestyles are changing very rapidly and this is affecting family relationships Do you think the advantages of this development outweighs the disadvantages 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... to many conflicting perspectives about whether or not they have a strong influence on family ...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...ant role in their works and daily life. Everyday, people rush to work from the early mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05555555556 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78387351988 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6454683271 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.333333333 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146123427278 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576184685418 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485268680602 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101570068724 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441445799769 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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