Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (aged five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to maths, science, history and language.
On the list of responsibilities for every education system, selecting an efficient syllabus ranks near the top. In this regard, there are many controversial discussions. While some people and policy makers think it is not necessary for children to learn music and art, others, including me, believe that music and art classes highly contribute to children's prosperity. I will elaborate on my view in the following paragraphs.
First, art and music boost students' out-of-box-thinking. Music and art are full of exotic material; they propose different worldviews and mirror emotions in creative ways. Learning and analysing art and music masterpieces stimulate imagination and visualisation lesions of the brain. Analysing and understanding of art and music foster the same abilities that artists have used to create them. So, due to the creative nature of art and music, that will enhance them in students as well. For example, my teacher in elementary school used to take us to art galleries and museums. After visiting sculptures and paintings, she asks us to interpret what we see as assignments. These kinds of tasks help me deploy a creative worldview, and be sensitive to important details in everything. I remember that, after that class I was able to analyse tiny elements in other lessons like language and maths and use those items to memorise them better.
Second, from a scientific point of view, art and music is a suitable way to relieve stress and enhance life-quality, which prepares students for future life. No one can gainsay the fact that life is rife with tensions and one has to practise some sought-after skills to manage their negative feelings. When it comes to easing stress, for many people music and art is second to none. As many people are not able to explain how they feel in the moment they feel bad, music and art project their emotions. This is psychologically proven that listening to a music which speaks volumes of people help them to increase self-awareness and wind their sadness and anger. On the other hand, adults are pressed for time and cannot allocate a lot of time to learn signing music instument or making some amatuer artwork. It is better for people to learn these material when they are children
In conclusion, art and music's importance is no less than maths, science and history because it enhances students' creative thinking, and helps them relieve their stress.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 437, Rule ID: IN_THE_MOMENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at the moment' (=currently)?
Suggestion: at the moment
...e are not able to explain how they feel in the moment they feel bad, music and art project th...
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Line 6, column 753, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to sign'.
Suggestion: to sign
... cannot allocate a lot of time to learn signing music instument or making some amatuer ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... these material when they are children In conclusion, art and musics importance...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0775 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84542505612 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3673106833 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.55 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164618988876 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499599227945 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334777287711 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105153029461 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179725420042 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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