Many people spend a lot of money on clothes, haircuts, and beauty products to enhance their appearance. Some people think that it is a good way to spend money, while others think that there is a better way to spend it.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, plenty of people tend to spend a large part of their budget on beauty salons, cosmetics and fashion in chase of perfection. Thus, there is an opinion that it is the preferable way to deal with finances. Meanwhile, some people argue that there are better options for wasting money. In this essay, I will consider both sides of the argument and then give my own opinion on the matter.
First, some people assume that person’s appearance is very important for a successful life in modern reality that is why investing money in it might be considered a valuable asset. Especially this is true for women due to the fact that society still pushes them to get married at an early age and in spite of body positive movement there are still high beauty standards and pressure from the masses on how somebody should look like. For example, people would treat them with more respect if someone was wearing an expensive suit, a brand wristwatch and had a fresh modern haircut.
However, on another side of the argument are those who believe that there are much more important areas of our lives that needed properly funded. The supporters of this point of view might argue that spending money on the beauty industry will not bring any happiness to a person who is doing it. However, investing money in charity, travel and social projects will bring a personal sense of fulfilment and satisfaction. For instance, one of my friends in chase of beauty and trying pleased surrounding people used to waste loads of money on cloth and different cosmetic procedures. However, she stayed unhappy until the moment she started to support a local dog’s shelter.
In conclusion, both sides of the argument have their merits. On balance, however, I believe that taking care of someone’s appearance is a good way of spending money, meanwhile, it should not become an obsession and a person should not forget there are other aspects of life. In the end, love, compassion, friendship and mutual help are more important than somebody’s look.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, so, still, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90751445087 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53378389185 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57225433526 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5482945078 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.2 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0666666667 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266128360724 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081651966254 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635469396466 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164247190104 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677077520021 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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