Task 1 TASK IMAGE The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra on a weekday and on the weekend in 2019 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

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Task 1

TASK IMAGE
The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra, on a weekday and on the weekend, in 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the number of travellers visiting drifferent types of attactions in Camberra in weekday and weekend in 2019
It is really clear that the number of visitors coming in the weekend is always higher than the number of visitors coming in the weekday.The number of visitors come to cafes and restaurants is the highest number of six types
The number of travellers coming to parks at the weekend in 2019 were 100 peoples per week,a very high number.In constrast,the number of visitors coming in the weekday were 2 times fewer than that of weekday,about over 40 peoples per week.This isn't only happened with the park visitors,but also happened with the figure for the shopping centres visitors.The figure for the persons coming to each shopping centres in weekend per week were smaller than that of parks,about 90 persons.When the number of visitors who came to the shopping centres in weekend were fewer than the parks one,the figure for the peoples come to shopping center at weekday were higher than that of parks,about 60 peoples for each restaurants.The highest number was the people who come to cafes and restaurants.the numeber of peoples who come to this types of attraction at the weekend were really high,about 150 persons and the number of people coming to cafes and restaurant at weekday were 2 times fewer than that of the weekend,about 80 person.
The number of people who come to 3 left types of attraction was smaller than that of 3 first a lot.the number of visitors who coming to the museum at the weekend were over 60 peoples and that of weekday is 2 times smaller,about over 20 peoples.Beside that,the number of travellers coming to movie theatres were higher than museum ones,at the weekend were 80 persons and the weekday were 40 person.The last types of attractions were not attracted a lot of persins,for weekend were 27 visitors and weekday were 22 travellers

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 7.0 286% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 3.15609756098 444% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 33.7804878049 186% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 965.302439024 164% => OK
No of words: 322.0 196.424390244 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92857142857 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81743436875 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.341614906832 0.547539520022 62% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 283.868780488 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.33902439024 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 8.94146341463 22% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 161.0 22.4926829268 716% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 430.0 43.030603864 999% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 793.5 112.824112599 703% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 161.0 22.9334400587 702% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.0 5.23603664747 306% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 1.69756097561 1649% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17770687212 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159323287315 0.103423049105 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.011269252297 0.0843802449381 13% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169047438522 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439521202956 0.0819641961636 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 82.3 13.2329268293 622% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -83.48 61.2550243902 -136% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 64.9 10.3012195122 630% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.5 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 14.02 8.06136585366 174% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 52.0 11.4329268293 455% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 66.4 10.9970731707 604% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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