Cam IELTS 8 writing test 1 Task 1
The pie chart displays 4 major culprits of global land deterioration, while the table focuses data on the adverse effects of these causes on 3 distant areas of the world throughout the 1990s.
Overall, there existed around 3 main factors that influenced farmland worldwide, especially over-grazing. Meanwhile, Europe has the highest proportion of unproductive land all over the world.
Regarding the pie chart, due to the dramatical increase in the number of animals fed on arable land, over-grazing accounted for 35%, which was the biggest percentage leading to erosive land. Forest destruction and over-cultivation, which are also attributed to the reason why farmland becomes degraded, are responsible for 30% and 28% respectively. Other reasons only accounted for 7%.
Turning to the table, the highest figure for nearly a quarter of deteriorated agricultural land is mainly defined as deforested activities, at roughly 9.8%. Overfarming damaged 1.5% of farmland in North America, which was 6 times lower than that of Oceania. In Oceania, over-cultivation did no harm to the land here but it made over 7% and 3% of farmland in North America and the Eurozone to be degrade, respectively.
Thank for your help!
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, regarding, so, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1025.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33854166667 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16234199622 2.65546596893 119% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 106.607317073 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.697916666667 0.547539520022 127% => OK
syllable_count: 313.2 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.4742551061 43.030603864 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.23603664747 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.06136585366 123% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 40.7170731707 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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