*The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal
Books, which recently opened its own café.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
In the following recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books it was stated that the Monarch Books must open a café in its store. To support the argument the evidence provided was that Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years and also has a large customer base which will attract more customers upon the opening of the café .Also they state that for café space can be made by discontinuing the children book section , citing the reason of that its popularity will decrease in coming years. Though the underlying issue is valid , because of lack of evidence and vague language , this recommendation is deeply flawed. Following are some of the questions that would need to be answered to come to the conclusion.
Firstly, having the large customer base for the shop can it be considered as the sole and viable reason to open a café ? For example it may be the case that the customers would only love to buy books from the store instead of coming to the café. Perhaps the customers would love to continue visiting to their old favourite café. If the above points are true , then the authors argument gets weakened.
Secondly, discontinuing the children's book section just because the recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten sounds too weak and a decision taken without much interpretation. What if the store is famous for the Children Book section? Perhaps the buyers mostly comprise of children of age below 10. Therefore this action to create space for Café by removing the children section holds no water
Finally , the author compares that the opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café. Here the author makes a baseless comparison between Monarch and Regal Café. For example , the author here does not take into account the area and the popularity of Regal Café . What is more people love to Visit Regal Books for its Café rather than the Book store. Also there is no description regarding any other café in the area which can give competioon to the Monarch Book store. So basically weakening the argument further.
To sum up, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumtions. If the author is able to provide more evidence (perhaps in the form of systematic research study) then it will be possible to fully evaluate the argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92488262911 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56472210699 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504694835681 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.5426673572 49.4020404114 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.421052632 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456860406927 0.244688304435 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122924823731 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131960976296 0.0667982634062 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223480707223 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.18007352995 0.056905535591 316% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.33 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.