You have had a class discussion about computer games. Write an essay giving your opinion on the following statement: “Computer games can be harmful”.
Accessing computers has increased significantly over recent decades, and the number of children playing games on computers has increased too. In this essay, I will consider the positive and negative impacts of this and discuss ways to avoid the potential adverse effects. With regards to the positive effects, we can relax for our mind by playing computer games. After working a long time, surely our brain needs to have some relaxation, and playing such games can be an excellent way to have rest. Also, players can chat with their friends directly or through social networks websites. Computer games create a friendship and have become a socializing tool to build and strength strong relationship between friends. Moreover, playing computer games can develop children's cognitive skills. Many popular games require abstract and high-level thinking skills to win, skills that may not be taught at school. For example, children need to follow instructions, solve complex problems and use logic in many of the games that are currently popular. Such experience will be beneficial to a child's progression into an adult. However, concerns have been raised about the prolific use of computer games by children, much of this related to the violence they contain. The problem is that in many of the games, children are rewarded for being more violent, and this violence is repeated again and again. For instance, many games involve children helping their character to kill, kick, stab and shoot. This may lead to increased aggressive feelings, thoughts, and behaviours. Besides, playing computer games overtime brings about health problems. Most of the players who spend much time in front of the computer, usually end up with sigh problems, because of the light from the screen of the computer. Due to that sight problem, they can't see from a distance which may affect their activities such studies. Researches discovered playing games overtime could entail health risks such as obesity, eye damage, and exposure to radiation. On the other hand, sitting on a chair for a long time, with-out exercising brings obesity or overweight. Most game players don't use; instead, they eat junk food, which is not suitable for our health. The combination of eating junk food and not exercising can easily result in obesity in a short period. To minimize these negative impacts, parents need to take specific steps. Firstly, some video games are rated according to their content, so parents must check this and ensure their children are not allowed to have access to unsuitable games. Parents can also set limits on the length of time games are played. Finally, parents should also take an active interest in the games their children are playing so they can find out how they feel about what they are observing. To sum up, there are benefits of computer games, but there are disadvantages too. However, if parents take adequate precautions, the severity of these negative impacts can be avoided.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1366, Rule ID: REPEAT_AGAIN[1]
Message: Use simply 'repeated'.
Suggestion: repeated
...eing more violent, and this violence is repeated again and again. For instance, many games inv...
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Line 1, column 1821, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...mputer. Due to that sight problem, they cant see from a distance which may affect th...
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Line 1, column 2144, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...besity or overweight. Most game players dont use; instead, they eat junk food, which...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2491.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 485.0 315.596192385 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13608247423 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53023716614 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 176.041082164 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550515463918 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 506.74238477 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6564693253 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2592592593 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.962962963 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282011791153 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796213130546 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630239762166 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282011791153 0.151304729494 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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