Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Private time plays an essential part in everybody's life. We all work hard nowadays in the competing environment, and after burning the midnight oil, we need privacy. Although some people would harbor the view that celebrities don't deserve privacy as they are in an entertainment business, I am of the conviction that entertainers and athletes need private space and would develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, without ignoring the fact that celebrities enjoy the people's attention, they do need private space to spend time with their family and friends. While performing, they conquer several challenges such as traveling to new locations, meeting people from different nationalities, etc. so they need to spend time with their near and dears to live a stress-free life. I must say that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced my own experience. For example, last year, I traveled from Delhi to Mumbai. In the flight, I met a renowned cricketer name Kapil Dev, who looks energetic and friendly. The referred player played a crucial role in winning the 1983 world cup. But I observed that people in the plane took undue advantage by clicking his photographs without his permission, which I did not appreciate. As we can see from this example, if we don't give entertainers and sportspeople a space, they are frustrated.
Secondly, famous people's children are the most affected in our society due to undesired attention given by photographers. Although children love to get clicked, but if they develop a habit of people around them at all places such as restaurants, fitness clubs, showrooms, etc., they started to feel like celebrities without doing any hard work. Thus, this behavior can ruin their career. Drawing from my experience, I can recall one of the great actors, Dharemder Singh, who used to perform extraordinarily in the nineties from Bollywood. However, his son, who was pictured at a young age, later became a drug-addict because a close attention influenced him. Furthermore, he filed a harassment case against a news channel called Republic TV, but could not win the case. For this reason, had media not given him importance, his career would not have ruined.
In view of the reasons mentioned, I would strongly recommend giving entertainers and athletes a private space. This is because they can live stress-free lives with their parents and family, whereas their children can focus on their careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, while, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.5418719212 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 6.10837438424 246% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 8.36945812808 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 20.9802955665 234% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 31.9359605911 147% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1207.87684729 171% => OK
No of words: 401.0 242.827586207 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1421446384 5.00649968141 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 3.92707691288 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87301926768 2.71678728327 106% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 139.433497537 173% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600997506234 0.580463131201 104% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 379.143842365 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 4.6157635468 368% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.931034482759 430% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 12.6551724138 166% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9448675633 50.4703680194 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1904761905 104.977214359 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 20.9669160288 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 7.25397266985 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 6.9802955665 172% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125289905337 0.242375264174 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319791077115 0.0925447433944 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380469679306 0.071462118173 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775304432712 0.151781067708 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00484383725199 0.0609392437508 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 12.6369458128 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 11.5310837438 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32886699507 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 55.0591133005 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 74.4444444444 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 67.0 Out of 90
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