Effective learning requires time, comfort and peace so it is impossible to combine study and employment. Study and employment distract one from another. To what extent do you think the statements are realistic? Support your opinion with examples?

Submitted by prabh2015 on Fri, 05/25/2018 - 23:18

The importance of the effective learning which was always debatable has now become an unprecedented controversy. The substantial influence of education has sparked controversy over the potential impact of this trend of doing the job while studying in recent years. Some people claim that handling both together is easily possible while others believe that education and occupation both distract from each other. The following essay will delineate the positive and negative impact of the work on the quality of learning before deducing a logical conclusion.

At the very outset, there are numerous arguments in support of employment with education, but the most preponderant is learning while earning makes an individual more productive and increase one's potential. To illustrate this point, nowadays many students are doing jobs during their student life and they are preparing themselves for future life also. Moreover, sometimes parents are unable to bear expenses of their children’s education so it is lucrative to do some part-time job. Thus, employment plays a vital role in the effective learning of a student.

On the other hand, opponents of the view stated above may defend that children are put into some labour to make more money. Although it is partially true that children of students can be ruined and they might be exploited but it is almost impossible to rule out the possibility of managing it with self-determination and strong willpower. with self-determination and strong willpower.

Eventually, according to what has been discussed above, I strongly concede that despite some drawbacks, the benefits of the evolution of the employment and education cannot be ignored.

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Average: 8.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 192, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...individual more productive and increase ones potential. To illustrate this point, no...
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Line 6, column 348, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...re preparing themselves for future life also. Moreover, sometimes parents are unable...
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Line 8, column 341, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: With
...lf-determination and strong willpower. with self-determination and strong willpower...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.5418719212 142% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 31.9359605911 122% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.75862068966 243% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1446.0 1207.87684729 120% => OK
No of words: 264.0 242.827586207 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47727272727 5.00649968141 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0412680406 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 139.433497537 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632575757576 0.580463131201 109% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 379.143842365 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.6157635468 22% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8276983561 50.4703680194 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.5 104.977214359 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.9669160288 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 7.25397266985 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15621615025 0.242375264174 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522520426292 0.0925447433944 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318306094039 0.071462118173 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784115583151 0.151781067708 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401316729482 0.0609392437508 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 12.6369458128 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.1260098522 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.9458128079 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 11.5310837438 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.32886699507 117% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 55.0591133005 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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