It has been noticed that recent young people are spending their leisure time in shopping centers but not engaging their selves in other activities such as sport or music.
Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
How children and adolescents are supposed to spend their free time has long been a controversial issue. Nowadays, it is obvious that youngsters prefer to spend their spare time in shopping malls rather than doing sports or other activities such as music. It is argued whether this development is beneficial or not. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
Those who support the idea of children spending more time in shopping malls than in doing sports believe that young people should not be denied their right to enjoy their time with their friends in shopping malls, which are the best venues for that. For example, now shopping centers do not only consist of shops, but also cinemas, food court outlets, as well as high-end restaurants. Hence, youngsters can easily do more than one activity in the same place. That makes it clear why the fact that adolescents tend to spend more time in leisure centers has garnered support.
Despite these reasons, opponents of the fact that children does not spend enough time sporting or practicing hobbies have more convincing reasons; First, doing sports regularly is crucial for children and youth due to its concomitant health benefits. Second, Exercising nurture their minds, souls and bodies. For instance, practicing sports in teams trigger children to compete and maintain a healthy social relationship with their friends. Finally, practicing hobbies are imperative and extremely advantageous. Take for example, music has been proved to be beneficial, furthermore, it helps youngsters in focusing and relaxes their minds, which is why it is obvious that children ought to spend more time doing spots and practicing hobbies as music.
In conclusion, although spending leisure time in shopping centers may seem more preferable and enjoyable for young people, I agree that it is not a positive development, owing to the numerous positive effects of exercising and music. That is why parents are recommended to encourage their offspring to spend their time wisely.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, may, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.5418719212 161% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 8.36945812808 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 5.94088669951 202% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 20.9802955665 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1207.87684729 144% => OK
No of words: 331.0 242.827586207 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25679758308 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 3.92707691288 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64733257575 2.71678728327 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 139.433497537 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540785498489 0.580463131201 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 379.143842365 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2896015928 50.4703680194 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 104.977214359 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 20.9669160288 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73333333333 7.25397266985 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 6.9802955665 172% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394202157124 0.242375264174 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128195311318 0.0925447433944 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960108528386 0.071462118173 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259436465595 0.151781067708 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519802160887 0.0609392437508 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 12.6369458128 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.1260098522 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.9458128079 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 11.5310837438 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32886699507 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 55.0591133005 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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