In many countries, college education is closely associated with part time work. Teenagers earn their living expenses while they undergo formal education at school/college. In many other countries, however, teenagers are expected to concentrate only on the

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In many countries, college education is closely associated with part time work. Teenagers earn their living expenses while they undergo formal education at school/college. In many other countries, however, teenagers are expected to concentrate only on their academics, without the distraction of a regular job.

Which system do you consider in the better interest of the teenagers? Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.

One of the most conspicuous trends today's world is in many countries teenagers earn their expenses while they undergo formal education at school and college but in many countries teenahers are expected to concentrate only on their academics. There is widespread worry that this would only lead to myraid concern in the world. In my opinion, I agree with the second satement. I will discuss my view in upcoming paragraph.

There is a dialuge of the arguments in favor of my stance. The most preponderant one is that today very fast era. Everyone busy in our life. Many students studing in the top universities and colleges. Many college education provide more jobs for students after study.

Moreover, I think second statement is very right that is teenagers are expected to only concentrate on own education. Because students are concentrate on education then they are get big goal in own life. Most of the students do the practical theory in the college and they improve the knowledge.

I think this is good idea for the all students that is those are only concentrate on study. But on the other side many teenagers only work then they do not concentrate on study and do the only work.

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Average: 5.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d to only concentrate on own education. Because students are concentrate on education t...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...entrate on study and do the only work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, second, then, while, i think, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 6.10837438424 33% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 20.9802955665 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 31.9359605911 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 995.0 1207.87684729 82% => OK
No of words: 205.0 242.827586207 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85365853659 5.00649968141 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.92707691288 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64637630639 2.71678728327 97% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 139.433497537 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521951219512 0.580463131201 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 320.4 379.143842365 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.5024630542 68% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0181599675 50.4703680194 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.0714285714 104.977214359 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6428571429 20.9669160288 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 7.25397266985 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 2.91625615764 309% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362819137741 0.242375264174 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962651950093 0.0925447433944 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121373573422 0.071462118173 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20973311961 0.151781067708 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872669054585 0.0609392437508 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 12.6369458128 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 53.1260098522 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.9458128079 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 11.5310837438 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.32886699507 88% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 55.0591133005 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.94827586207 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.3980295567 73% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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