Movie stars and celebrities should be good role models and use their fame to promote worthy causes to what extent do you agree with this statement use specific reasons and examples to suppoer your opinion

Essay topics:

Movie stars and celebrities should be good role models and use their fame to promote worthy causes. to what extent do you agree with this statement?use specific reasons and
examples to suppoer your opinion.

although such topic will never yield a consensual agreement, a dialogue on movie stars and celebrities can lead to a thought provoking discussions.my view is that irrespective of
numerouse ideas that exist on either sides celebrities and movie starts can lead in positive ways consequently disadvantages is also been considered.my point of view will be
pharaphrased in this essay

Firstly,celebrities and film starts are using their fame to promot or campaign a product, so we find the product in demand. we find celebrities are promoting the education system
by advertising it with online class,smart calss ect..so students in-order to involve in studies in E-classes and they develop themselves in general knowledge eventually students are
attracted to movie stars and listen their quotes through advertisements.

secondly,we find movie stars involving the students in knowledge gaining consequently physical development is been in less. we find many sports persons are promoting the kids to play
video games for eg. football in play station. there are video games been developed by the sports persons through kids are been affected by not playing outdoor games and they get addicted
with electronic games which leads them unhealthy.

to conclude with, film stars are promoting the educations in an innovative way but we find the physical activity is totally not involved. so sports starts should try to promote the kids to
paly outdoor instead of video games so they can be healthy and fit.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.5418719212 161% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 5.94088669951 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 31.9359605911 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1284.0 1207.87684729 106% => OK
No of words: 237.0 242.827586207 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41772151899 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 3.92707691288 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04599854579 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 139.433497537 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569620253165 0.580463131201 98% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 379.143842365 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6551724138 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.5024630542 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.624463518 50.4703680194 289% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.5 104.977214359 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.625 20.9669160288 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 7.25397266985 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.12807881773 266% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.33497536946 337% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156876764977 0.242375264174 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061198522381 0.0925447433944 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464042627327 0.071462118173 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0631889779634 0.151781067708 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426237342988 0.0609392437508 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 12.6369458128 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 53.1260098522 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.9458128079 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.75 11.5310837438 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.32886699507 115% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 55.0591133005 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 9.94827586207 317% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.3980295567 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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