Nowadays, people believe that the environment influences their accomplishments. Some people think their success and accomplishment were influenced by the places where they grew up. Do you think the environment does or does not affect people’s accomplishment and how it affects?
Nowadays, people become more aware that the environment influences people's accomplishments is playing an increasingly important role in our daily life. While some people believe that their success and achievements are influenced by where they grew up, others oppose that their accomplishments have nothing to do with the environment. In my opinion, people's success relates closely to their growth environment, which can be supported by the reasons as follows.
It is reasonable for me to believe that the growth environment has a profound impact on people's accomplishments, which is understandable because when getting the advantage of financial support, it will be easier to succeed. To be more specific, people who born with a golden spoon have taken the lead to gain an advantage, so they have higher economic-social status than ordinary people. To further support the above statement, in my country, many rich second generations have the financial appropriation from the government when they are ready to start a business.
Besides, the second justification of this view is that the educational environment can determine the people's success or failure, which is reasonable because the well-organized education system can provide rich educational resources. Specifically, the well-designed education system contains many unique courses that allow people to broaden their horizons and expands social circles to achieve personal accomplishment. A recent study from Oxford University can prove this. The study pointed out that 76% of successful people have received a high-quality education.
In a nutshell, although this controversial topic never fails to attract public attention, we may safely conclude that the environment will influence people's accomplishments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ucational environment can determine the peoples success or failure, which is reasonable...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, may, second, so, well, while, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 8.36945812808 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 5.94088669951 252% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 25.0 20.9802955665 119% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 31.9359605911 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 5.75862068966 278% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1207.87684729 125% => OK
No of words: 263.0 242.827586207 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76045627376 5.00649968141 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32432918632 2.71678728327 122% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 139.433497537 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619771863118 0.580463131201 107% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 379.143842365 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5024630542 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5861510464 50.4703680194 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.727272727 104.977214359 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9090909091 20.9669160288 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 7.25397266985 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 2.75862068966 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333915718159 0.242375264174 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127487040545 0.0925447433944 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119041796353 0.071462118173 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202266172805 0.151781067708 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150250745173 0.0609392437508 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 12.6369458128 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 53.1260098522 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.9458128079 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 11.5310837438 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.32886699507 119% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 55.0591133005 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.94827586207 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.3980295567 108% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.5123152709 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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