Obesity has been linked to excessive sugar consumption. Some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to dissuade people from drinkingthem while others think that a tax is unnecessary and that public education is the best way to decrease sugar co

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Obesity has been linked to excessive sugar consumption. Some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to dissuade people from drinking
them while others think that a tax is unnecessary and that public education is the best way to decrease sugar consumption.

Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences,
observations or reading.

Write between 200 and 300 words.

Since the beginning of the 21st century, a high number of foods and beverages have contained a high percentage of sugar, which consequently increase the obesity phenomenon. Some people believe that governments should impose high taxes on these products in order to limit the consumption of these products, while others argue that sugar consumption could be decreased more effectively through educating people using advertisements. This essay will discuss how increasing the taxes on foods and beverages will cause a huge impact on people consumption and therefore will reduce the spread of obesity problem within the societies.

Firstly, increasing prices of the products which contain sugar will lead people to choose other products which contain less sugar. People prefer choosing the cheapest products, and consequently, the obesity problem will be solved. Recent research, which was made in USA, has shown that American people have altered toward the diet foods because they are less expensive. Therefore, it seems clear that increasing prices of foods will solve the obesity problem.

Secondly, imposing more taxes on the eating products, which contain sugar, protect the health of people. Obesity is a dangerous disease, which needs a lot of money to treat from. Recent research, which was made in USA, has shown that American government spends more than 2 trillion dollars on curing people from the obesity diseases. Thus, increasing prices of sugary foods and beverages will reduce the cost of curing, and consequently, this money could be used in other beneficial fields.

In conclusion, this essay discussed how increasing taxes on foods and beverages which include sugar will improve the economic of the country. In my opinion, I am inclined to believe that raising taxes on sugary foods will protect people health and will have a significant impact on the country economical situation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 295, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ave a significant impact on the country economical situation.
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.5418719212 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 6.10837438424 213% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 5.94088669951 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 15.0 20.9802955665 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1207.87684729 133% => OK
No of words: 298.0 242.827586207 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40604026846 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65118723368 2.71678728327 98% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 139.433497537 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489932885906 0.580463131201 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 379.143842365 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4473859962 50.4703680194 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.923076923 104.977214359 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.9669160288 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.25397266985 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249181331316 0.242375264174 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989047282582 0.0925447433944 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640129382773 0.071462118173 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170373615341 0.151781067708 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443890940645 0.0609392437508 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 12.6369458128 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.1260098522 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 11.5310837438 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32886699507 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 55.0591133005 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.94827586207 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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