Some people argue that young people should concentrate on study or work, some people think it is better to put
energy in activities designed to broaden their experience, such as international travel and volunteering. Support with
examples or cases.
Nowadays, whether young people should concentrate on study or work has attracted numerous controversies and drawn the attention from the public and people believe that designed activities are highly beneficial, while others hold the view that professionalism and study are what youngsters should be focused on. In my opinion, I believe education and career are more important due to they set a firm foundation for future and youngsters won’t fall behind in life.
Firstly, it is extremely competitive in the real world, most companies would prefer not to hire the inexperienced. Focusing on a career after graduating from high school or university grants youngsters to broaden their professional knowledge and gain legitimate work related experiences. This will certainly shape young people and gradually they will become more confident in their profession.
Secondly, if young people put in excessive attention on experience broadening exercises, they will fall behind if compared to their peers. It is also possible that students could fail in subjects which could result in delays from graduation. For instance, I was too focused on travelling when I was studying in university and the consequence was that I failed a course unit which resulted in a year’s delay in completion of the course.
In conclusion, I hold the view that youngsters should pay undivided attention on education or professionalism because they can gain valuable career experiences and they will keep the youngsters on the right track.
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- Some people argue that young people should concentrate on study or work some people think it is better to put energy in activities designed to broaden their experience such as international travel and volunteering Support with examples or cases 84
- Parents should be held legally responsible for their children s acts What is your opinion Support it with personal examples 77
- Many people choose to emigrate to other countries What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in a foreign country Discuss with your own experience 77
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 8.36945812808 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 31.9359605911 91% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.75862068966 191% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1288.0 1207.87684729 107% => OK
No of words: 237.0 242.827586207 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43459915612 5.00649968141 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 3.92707691288 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04368895312 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 139.433497537 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590717299578 0.580463131201 102% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 379.143842365 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6551724138 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.5024630542 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6177902382 50.4703680194 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.111111111 104.977214359 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 20.9669160288 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5555555556 7.25397266985 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201414324377 0.242375264174 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795462911357 0.0925447433944 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905864087737 0.071462118173 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115290425442 0.151781067708 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574871258971 0.0609392437508 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 12.6369458128 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.1260098522 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.9458128079 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 11.5310837438 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.32886699507 107% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 55.0591133005 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.94827586207 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.3980295567 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.4444444444 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.