Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do you
support or not?
Nowadays, following actors or sportsperson as a role model has become a long-running dispute among the public all over the world, which leads to a moot question “whether wellknown people can be an appropriate role model for youngsters or not?”. It is a widely held view that being as an glamorous film or sport star is highly beneficial, whereas I tend to believe that one must weigh up the pros and cons of this issue.
To begin with, it is a common belief that considering a wellknown film or sport star as a role model plays a vital role in the younster’s life. To put into consideration, I express why I do not support this idea. First and foremost is that the juvenils will neglect their education and they might be failed in their exams, and subsequently they will miss all their job opportunities that they could have had. Secondly, it can be argued that the majority of film or sort stars are bolded just for their fashion cloths or their special behavior that causes the juvenils spend large amount of money to be like them. In addition to this information, it should be mentioned that behavioral corruption and addiction to alcohol is exsessively prevail among them that cause damaging consequenses to the young people.
However, there is no doubt that following wellknown stars as a role model provides people with various positive points. It should be taken into account that youth will be able to continue thir activities in art and sport and bring the popularity for themselves and country.
To recapitulate, I firmely believe that considering film or sportsperson as a role model must be taken into consideration. However, as every garden may have some weeds, the local authorities are recommended to enforce stricter legislation, and individuals are hoped to heighten their intellect.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...sportsperson as a role model has become a long-running dispute among the public all over the w...
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Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... It is a widely held view that being as an glamorous film or sport star is highly ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, in addition, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.5418719212 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 8.36945812808 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 5.94088669951 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 20.9802955665 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1207.87684729 126% => OK
No of words: 305.0 242.827586207 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99672131148 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9409781238 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 139.433497537 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56393442623 0.580463131201 97% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 379.143842365 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.5024630542 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.7432873565 50.4703680194 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.545454545 104.977214359 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 20.9669160288 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 7.25397266985 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26091708835 0.242375264174 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10079011276 0.0925447433944 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086205284937 0.071462118173 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159178523192 0.151781067708 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511941922189 0.0609392437508 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 12.6369458128 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.1260098522 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.9458128079 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 11.5310837438 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 55.0591133005 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.94827586207 181% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.3980295567 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.