Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do you support or not?
Recently, the phenomenon of having a role model for youth and its corresponding impact has sparked a heated debate. Although, contested by many having a role model for younger people is highly beneficial, such issues are regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that selecting stars as a role model for teenagers can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
From the educational standpoint, superstars as a role model can provide a society with noticeable effects which are rooted in the fact that cultural improvement, as well as educational impacts, are inextricably bound up. According to my personal experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered teenagers with role models trying harder to achieve success and in most cases the reach their goals. Besides, obviously, it can be seen a great improvement in their cultural behaviour such as politeness and being respectful to adults. Thus, the beneficial consequences of both superstars as role models and their positive impacts on cultural and educational issues apparently can be seen.
Within the realm of nurturing, having exotic role models might increase the consequences of committing a crime. Moreover, the fundamental aspects of juvenile delinquencies related to this reality that the demerits of youngsters' misbehaving pertain to selecting inappropriate role models. As a tangible example, a scientific research is undertaken by a prestigious university has asserted that the downsides of inappropriate role models are correlated negatively with crime commitments Hence, it is correct to presume the preconceived the notion of wrong mentors selection.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that the benefits of having a perfect role model far outweigh its drawbacks. Not only do the advantages of reaching success prove the significance of role model's positive influences, but also pinpoint youth's goals implications.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'scientific research'.
Suggestion: scientific research
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, such as, as well as, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 20.9802955665 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1207.87684729 146% => OK
No of words: 317.0 242.827586207 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56151419558 5.00649968141 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 3.92707691288 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20742168441 2.71678728327 118% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 139.433497537 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580441640379 0.580463131201 100% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 379.143842365 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.5024630542 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.8259380066 50.4703680194 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.916666667 104.977214359 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 20.9669160288 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.25397266985 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220886983066 0.242375264174 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833192437743 0.0925447433944 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494431126369 0.071462118173 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134827637303 0.151781067708 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535876242654 0.0609392437508 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 12.6369458128 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 53.1260098522 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.9458128079 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 11.5310837438 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.5 8.32886699507 126% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 55.0591133005 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.94827586207 146% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.3980295567 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.5123152709 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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