Do you agree or disagree: in any society, the contribution of scientists and engineers are more important than contribution of artist and writers.
In our modern society there are numerous perspective professions that they are very prominent for our life. But there are some jobs that have vital role in our existence, such as scientists and engineers. Some people think that contribution of engineers and scientists are more important than the contribution of writers and artists. As far as I’m concerned donation to scientists and engineers are more prominent than other professions.
First, scientists and engineers’ works are more difficult and needs a lot of struggle for working. They work too hard for making our life comfortable. Scientists’ and engineers’ work predominant for our world. For example, my father is also an engineer. He works too hard for building new constructions, residences and etc. His work always makes him to strive for something in their work. He spends a lot of for time working and even he cannot get a good relax from the works when he has a little holiday. Therefore, government must donate a high salary for their hard work.
Second, scientists and engineers are very predominant because without them we cannot survive in this wild world. Scientists explore new things for making our life more convenient. Engineers also design new buildings, bridges and other construction for our comfort. For example, a washing machine is the simplest example of scientists’ work. This machine helps us in a very hard job; washing our clothes and we have already addicted to its existence. Even, we cannot imagine our daily life without it. Engineers also have same meaning for our modern society. Hence, we must pay sufficient attention to them.
Finally, we can say that scientist and engineers have special, important role in our life. Mankind presumably cannot survive without them and we depend their effective work. For these reason, government must donate them and make some convenience for their predominant work.
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Avg. Sentence Length: 14.045 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.885 7.5
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