Do you agree or disagree young people today are better able to make decisions for their own life than in the past.
One of the most significant standard of measuring whether a youth is mature is that if the individual can make decisions by themselves.Unfortunately,in my opinion,young people nowadays are less able to make decisions for their own life than in the past.I've enumerate two points give raise to this phenomenon as follows.
The main reason is the increasing pressure of the socity, which includs: the high house price, the low work rates, the adding tax , etc. As the social stress boosting, the parents geting more afraid of their child's future than the past.On the one hand,they expect their child win the life game though the possibility is decreasing. There's an extremly popular saying in China,"Don't let your child loose at the first step". As a resault,take their luxuriant experience into account,they make the choice for their child and even force they perform as they hope, so that they won't miss in the wrong road. On the other hand, under this circumstance of high stress, the parents's expectation for their children to be the kind of person as they persue has been strenghtend. They take measures to achieve this purpose.That devote to why they make decisions for their child.There are thounsands of examples in China that parents help their child make choice regardless of their child's own thoughts.For instance, A first place student of one province get the entrance of the Qinghua university, she found out that she's not capable of eating eggs after she went to the Qinghua university, even worse, she didn't know what kind of life she should choose.It's her parents handled all the other stuffs for her except the study lead to this consequence.
Besides,to analyse this problem in a different perspective,considering about the children themselves,they are less independent than the past generation.As the one-child policy in China, almost all of chinese family raise one chile only. However, in the past, a Chinese family has many children, and at least a boy. Besides, with the high speed development of the internet, the urbanization, we make less and less friends. Taking myself as an example, my parents just gave birth to one daughter, while my grandparents had two daughters and two sons. They went to school hand in hand, checked the homework for each other, did the housework at home, and also, discussed decisions together. For me, when I encountered a problem which I had never thought of before, I had no other choice but to ask for my parents' assistance, consequently, they make the decision for me.
In a word, compare to our predecessor, our generation are less competent to select due to the increasing pressure as well as the children's dependence on their parents.To futher my discussion, I recommend the parents give their child the advice and examples only, instead of making decision.I believe this will definitely help the child enhance their independence and capacity.
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Sentence: The main reason is the increasing pressure of the socity, which includs: the high house price, the low work rates, the adding tax , etc. As the social stress boosting, the parents geting more afraid of their child's future than the past.On the one hand,they expect their child win the life game though the possibility is decreasing.
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