In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
When a student has a job may be looking for experiences and some extra incoming which from some point of view may be good. However, personally I think is not a good idea for teenagers to have a job while they are still students.
First the students will not be focused on the school. While some students can work and be successful at school, I think having a job is a responsibility that will consume time, sometimes students will have to sacrifice some school duty or even studying for a test just because they don’t have enough time. This happens even if the job they have consumes a little amo...
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When a student has a job may be looking for experiences and some extra incoming which from some point of view may be good.
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