There are people who dos not really work hard, but theey end up being successful in this world. Meanwhile, other people work absolutely hard, and they don't succeed in their life. That is why I believe that luck can sometimes play a part.
First of all, there are people who succeed in their lives , without working that much hard. Suzan Boyle can present a great example of what i'm talking about. She was actually an indigent British lady, who was even diagnosed with brain damage in her early chilhood, the fact that explains why she was vulnerable to bullying during her school years. It was no...
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Sentence: There are people who dos not really work hard, but theey end up being successful in this world.
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Sentence: She was actually an indigent British lady, who was even diagnosed with brain damage in her early chilhood, the fact that explains why she was vulnerable to bullying during her school years.
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Sentence: Therefore, in my opinion, this woman was obsolutely lucky to have such an innate wonderful and passionate voice, that can inevitably shake anyone, who listens to it, to the core.
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