You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy?

Money plays a very important role in everyone's life. Having enough money and investing on the right place is a very big decision to make. I would prefer to purchase a house instead of investing in business. For every people there will be a dream house and buying house brings us self satisfaction. Whereas, investing in business is sometimes successful or sometimes failure and one should have courage to take risk. Running a business needs lot of hard work and determination to thrive in the business and to achieve profit. Here are some reasons and examples.

First of all, staying in apartment...

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