The diagrams below show the development of a small fishing village and its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The development of a small fishing village and its ambiance in Europe has been plainly shown in these two diagrams from 1974 to 2004. Overall, there was a massive rise in total population 130,000 in 2004, where was used to be 12,000 in 1974.
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In 2004, the number of hotels had changed the harbor and the boats along the beach. In the same time, the woodland simply switched to golf course, and olive plants entirely replaced with farmland (fruit and vegetable for hotels). It was a curvy road as a result of demolishing cattle: sheep and goats which significantly showed through the beach
Also, there were several fundamental changes for a village which is near to the mountain, where the village council added tourist shops, connected to the farmland and homes of locals in 2004. Interestingly, the original village had no changes in between 1974 and 2004.
In conclusion, the development of total population in a small coastal village is boomed in a large tourist place.
Overall, there was a massive rise in total population 130,000 in 2004, where was used to be 12,000 in 1974.
Suggestion: Overall, there was a massive rise to a total population of 130,000 in 2004, while it was used to be 12,000 in 1974.
In 2004, the number of hotels had changed the harbor and the boats along the beach.
Suggestion: In 2004, the number of hotels and boats had changed at the harbor along the beach.
and olive plants entirely replaced with farmland
Suggestion: and olive plants are entirely replaced by farmland
sheep and goats which significantly showed through the beach
Suggestion: sheep and goats are significantly showed through the beach
where the village council added tourist shops, connected to the farmland and homes of locals in 2004
Suggestion: where the village council added tourist shops, connected the farmland to the homes of locals in 2004
the original village had no changes in between 1974 and 2004.
Suggestion: the original village had no changes from 1974 to 2004.
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