Some people say modern children’s games do not develop a wide range of skills, while traditional games can be much better for developing such skills. Some people say outdoor activities bring benefits to children’s development rather than computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
In this contemporary world, there are many kinds of children’s games on mobile phone but many people believed that this is not help for whole skills and traditional games is better. However, some people believed that outdoor activities help children to development rather than other games. In my opinion, two arguments also have negative and positive effect and this essay will examine both sides of the argument before conclusion is drawn.
Admittedly, there are some arguments in favor of children play games on computer or mobile phone do not develop a wide range of skills but traditional game is better and still suitable. First, create traditional games are believed to equalize playing opportunities among young adolescents regardless of their family background. First, traditional games presumably tends not only to increase the overall active person of lower-income people but also to mitigate their feeling of inferiority, which promotes an egalitarian society. Second, computer games as traditional game would probably result in a higher supply of highly qualified workers, which benefits society in the long run. In fact, it is acknowledged that skilled and knowledgeable human capital is imperative to foster economic growth and technological development in any nations. Furthermore, playing games on computer can help people to make friends or learn new langue by the game they choosing.
Nevertheless, the resultant problems would be far more significant than the minor benefits once children play computer games too much. Other believed that children need to have outdoor activities is good for their health and life.
First, outdoor activities such as escape to neighborhood parks, hiking through the woods, or spending a weekend by the lake can lower a person’s stress levels, help them to have a better feeling after a long day at school, meaning that government can easy to input healthcare systems and transport infrastructure. Second, outdoor activities could tempt many young people including they are good on sport and can successful in future or show interesting in doing sports and potentially save their time instead of stay at home and play game on computer. Especially, they can learn more thing from experience and also make they more energy. It, instead, would be a more leisure active option if the resources were focused on their health and have clearly plans to do in their free times.
In conclusion, computer games and outdoor activities also have disadvantages and advantages. From my perspective, I believe that children need to do more outdoor activities is better than any games and also help them more in their future career.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'helped'.
Suggestion: helped
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 1615.20841683 139% => OK
No of words: 424.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30896226415 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83397447269 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518867924528 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 706.5 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.887368196 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.411764706 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9411764706 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434549277778 0.244688304435 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148499297411 0.084324248473 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107755123853 0.0667982634062 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249550943001 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923395653701 0.056905535591 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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