There has been a widespread debate about which is the best way to prepare a child for adult life. Some people think that encouraging children to take a part-time job is the best way. However, I totally disagree for two main reasons.
To begin with, I believe each age of life has its own responsibilities. Children deserve to live and enjoy their age normally. It is unfair to have children do things that are not ready for. For instance, if a child has a part-time job in cleaning parks. It is not fair for that child doing this job while seeing other children same as his/her age playing in the park and having fun. The child could feel there is something taken away from him. Therefore, I'm completely convinced that children must not work like adults and they should live their age.
Moreover, children's body structure and ability are not suitable for work; thus, in my point of view, it is considered abusing if parents encourage their children to work like adults. My friend experience is a compelling example of this. When he was a child, his parents forced him to work in a company that needs a powerful hand working, because the main task in this job is carrying heavy metals. Sad to say, he had scars and browses from this job since he was a child. He did not live his life the same as I did. While I'm laughing and playing my video games with my friends, he was carrying loaded equipment. Needless to say, this is abusing situation that cost my friend's childhood.
In conclusion, children have the right as a human to live their lives at this age. This is because they don't deserve to lose their childhood from enjoyments and entertainments and to not abuse them by work that they cannot handle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48553752306 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551948051948 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.595494405 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.1052631579 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2105263158 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227914374531 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761925519548 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652109566869 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156286016496 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093017779073 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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